Hi, I'm Donovan Vazquez, with DON Enterprises. We've seen a huge need for washed and dried clothes, while not having to move the clothes from the washer to the dryer. Our company picks up old systems, applies them as a credit towards the newer more beneficial system, delivers, and installs the system to your location. I realized my last pitch, The company is an original full-service idea utilizing the lack of use in the amazing 2 in 1 invention. This weeks feedback was also crucial in helping me add the idea that the old systems could be used as charity to the needy. The minute dollars we lose from resale of the old systems, is incomparable to the money gained by the positive image these humanitarian efforts will yield, as well as the betterment of other's lives. Thank you for watching!
Hey Donovan! Great pitch! I think this is a really fantastic idea that I would love to see implemented! I think one thing that can be improved in your pitch is better explaining the difference between the new system and the old system. I was very confused when you were talking about credit and whatnot. Keep up the great work man! I hope you pursue this idea. Here is the link to my elevator pitch! http://adventuresofentrepreneurship.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no3.html
Hey! I think that your pitch is lacking a clear explanation of what your product is from the get-go. I was half way through your pitch before I had a clear concept of what you were selling. I think you would receive better results if A) you explained what your system is first, then the benefits such as replacing the old system and giving a credit, etc. and B) give your system a name instead of having to refer to the “old system” and “new system”. This would make your product sound much more exciting. You can see my elevator pitch at http://entreprenuerintraining.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html.
Hey there Donavan, this is the second time that I have gotten to comment on your blog. I think your idea is splendid and I would love to see it put into action. http://ochoasteven2018.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Hey Donavan, Your business idea sounds great! As some peer have already mentioned previously one thing I would work on for my next elevator pitch would be explanation/clarity of what it is your servicing or selling. Dont worry I had the same problem. Overall great job!
Below is a link to my blog, check it out sometime: http://xyzelayax.blogspot.com/?zx=32d432ea40b07faa
Hey Donovan!
ReplyDeleteGreat pitch! I think this is a really fantastic idea that I would love to see implemented! I think one thing that can be improved in your pitch is better explaining the difference between the new system and the old system. I was very confused when you were talking about credit and whatnot. Keep up the great work man! I hope you pursue this idea. Here is the link to my elevator pitch! http://adventuresofentrepreneurship.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no3.html
Hey! I think that your pitch is lacking a clear explanation of what your product is from the get-go. I was half way through your pitch before I had a clear concept of what you were selling. I think you would receive better results if A) you explained what your system is first, then the benefits such as replacing the old system and giving a credit, etc. and B) give your system a name instead of having to refer to the “old system” and “new system”. This would make your product sound much more exciting. You can see my elevator pitch at http://entreprenuerintraining.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html.
ReplyDeleteHey there Donavan, this is the second time that I have gotten to comment on your blog. I think your idea is splendid and I would love to see it put into action. http://ochoasteven2018.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
ReplyDeleteHey Donavan,
ReplyDeleteYour business idea sounds great! As some peer have already mentioned previously one thing I would work on for my next elevator pitch would be explanation/clarity of what it is your servicing or selling. Dont worry I had the same problem.
Overall great job!
Below is a link to my blog, check it out sometime:
http://xyzelayax.blogspot.com/?zx=32d432ea40b07faa